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"He was dead still. I could see beads of sweat forming on his forehead. His eyes turned to look at me as he held his finger to his mouth. That was a sign to be quiet. I really did not like the look on his face.

Then I heard it. The shuffle of dragon feet. It was not a small one. A shadow loomed over the shells. I saw the dragon's tail slither silently near me. The black scales glistened in the sunlight. I heard a soft thud as the shadow lowered. The dragon had lay down. Completely blocking our way."

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Comment by Aries on February 26, 2011 at 7:26pm: One note, shuffle is more or less reserved as a quasi-onomatopoeia for slow-moving things like something crawling or wounded. Dragons would hardly shuffle unless they were making a very poor attempt at moving silently. Being they generally have massive talons and huge bodies, even when young, it would more or less be scraping, crashing, etc.

Comment by F. E. Lockyer on February 26, 2011 at 7:39pm

Definitions of shuffle on the Web:

walk by dragging one's feet; "he shuffled out of the room"; "We heard his feet shuffling down the hall"
move about, move back and forth; "He shuffled his funds among different accounts in various countries so as to avoid the IRS"
the act of mixing cards haphazardly
mix so as to make a random order or arrangement; "shuffle the cards"
shamble: walking with a slow dragging motion without lifting your feet;

The dragon was making it's way to lay down to sleep, therefore, it was dragging its feet

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