Wasted

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Permalink Reply by W.J. O'Neil on November 20, 2011 at 8:51am

Short, nice, and so true! Self inflicted pain is as much or more so to those who love you dearly. There are no wasted lives in life as each life has a ripple effect on so many others around it.

Permalink Reply by Cleveland W. Gibson on November 21, 2011 at 11:50pm

Dear Carly

I think you've captured some excellent sentiments(your poem) on a subject that is not only deep but afflicks a number of young people. A poem can explain much in a few words. So well done for that.  Now to carry that message on to others you've used the vehicle of poetry. I've used poetry for a number of reasons in the past: litter; drugs; assault; the death of a clown; thoughts of an old soldier; sea rescue and the associated disaster.  My latest effort represents an anthology of war poems for the charity Combat Stress. I am proud to be included in 'Enduring Freedom.' ISBN 9781908487018

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

Best wishes

Cleveland

 

Permalink Reply by Carly Jean Montgomery-Wildermuth on November 22, 2011 at 12:53am

Cleveland I have been trying to get my poems published this one I would like to get out into the hands of readers as quick as possible if you have any tips that may help my accomplish this goal I would appretiate it alot....
Cleveland W. Gibson said:

Dear Carly

I think you've captured some excellent sentiments(your poem) on a subject that is not only deep but afflicks a number of young people. A poem can explain much in a few words. So well done for that.  Now to carry that message on to others you've used the vehicle of poetry. I've used poetry for a number of reasons in the past: litter; drugs; assault; the death of a clown; thoughts of an old soldier; sea rescue and the associated disaster.  My latest effort represents an anthology of war poems for the charity Combat Stress. I am proud to be included in 'Enduring Freedom.' ISBN 9781908487018

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

Best wishes

Cleveland

 

Permalink Reply by Carly Jean Montgomery-Wildermuth on November 22, 2011 at 12:55am

Thank you both for reading you both found the meaning before any of my friends (the one who thought of injury) did!
Thanks for reading
Carly Jean

Permalink Reply by Cleveland W. Gibson on November 24, 2011 at 9:27am

Hi Carly
The subject of your poem is not only sensitive but needs proper handling. To publish as it stands need,IMO, more content and a very strong theme all the way through that will interest the reader, no matter how serious the topic. FYEO is my consideration. Please request being a friend then we can exchange text and info if you feel you'd like me to help.

Cleveland

Poetry award winner 2011  www.CELJ.org

Carly Jean Montgomery-Wildermuth said:
Cleveland  this one(poem) I would like to get  to  readers as quick as possible if you have any tips  I would appretiate it alot....
Cleveland W. Gibson said:

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

 

Permalink Reply by Hilary Wreidt Thompson on December 1, 2011 at 11:50pm

I like this poem. I like to think of myself as a true poet to society. Sometimes by reading someone else's poem I am able to create. Her's one for your friends.

 

I am here and you are there, hold onto today,

we may be worlds apart but my heart is open

My ears are open to your pain and suffering

Hold onto the here and now

I have seen the world at war

hav e watch a full grown man cry

have seen myself hit drugs only to fall on my face

but today I am writing to you.

Hold it up and keep your head up!

Go ahead and cry if it helps..I do. 

I am here. 

No one is ever alone..your friend is here also.

Hilary Wreidt Thompson

Permalink Reply by FELISHA FRANCIS on December 13, 2011 at 2:13am

i love it because i can relate to it, sometimes i feel like a waste or i don't have no reason for being here. however your poem prove me wrong..thank you 

Permalink Reply by Carly Jean Montgomery-Wildermuth on December 17, 2011 at 1:57am

That is why I write to make others feel better I'm very happy that i helped you you are very welcome. (:
 
FELISHA FRANCIS said:

i love it because i can relate to it, sometimes i feel like a waste or i don't have no reason for being here. however your poem prove me wrong..thank you 

Permalink Reply by Jonathon Koerner on December 21, 2011 at 4:05am

Wow, I really like this. Defiantly inspirational. It's funny because I have one that's like exact opposite of this...called waist of molecular space, I will post it soon, but it was written when I was pretty upset/angry