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'sleeping with wolfs'

by Fel

your sleeping with wolfs my dear,

soon they'll rip your throat

in tiny little pieces.

Crushing your bones, scartering them

like jigsaw puzzle.

Sooner or later your heart will

be of no use.

for you told, you told them your secrets,

and everything about your life.

poison words they'll reveal to you,

telling you corruption and negativity

that should help sink your soul.

you believe everything they say

but turn deaf ears and blind eyes to me.

All i do was only love you.

then stab me in the back,

then you join their pack.

Now your left with cold past of furrs,

all you do is annoy me with your

cry and hurts.

I warn you about those blood sucking

wolfs.

That just want to know about your human

life,

to turn it up and down, left and right.

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Permalink Reply by Hilary Wreidt Thompson on December 10, 2011 at 11:53pm

This poem was intriguing of which I can relate to its bitter love and betrayel. It is soul cutting.

Permalink Reply by Cleveland W. Gibson on December 11, 2011 at 11:07pm

I've read your poem and though at first read it seems a pleasant enough poem I feel that there are 'things' concealed from the ordinary reader. What might help is knowing the background to the poem? In its present state it is 'easy' . But to move it upwards to a higher level needs slight changes that only you can make. It appears slightly in need or re-structuring because the lines are different lengths in each verse. Is there a reason for that? Why is the final verse in red? Does red have a special meaning? Has blood been spilt and why?

I can not but help feeling I'm missing something that you want to share. Perhaps it is in the attachment called unsave.aspx. which I cannot open. Others might be able to open it but does it explain everything. I have no idea. And lastly will you publish this poem? I'm in favopur of people publishing because then they will soon know what writing is all about.

Best wishes

Cleveland W. Gibson

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Permalink Reply by FELISHA FRANCIS on December 13, 2011 at 1:54am

yes there is a reason for the lines being lengthy.....the final verse in red because the friendship is now broken and blood was spill. lastly i plan to publish it but don't know where to..

Permalink Reply by FELISHA FRANCIS on December 13, 2011 at 1:55am

thank you

Permalink Reply by Cleveland W. Gibson on December 13, 2011 at 4:01pm

The poem is already published by being on-line. But I think you might want to publish in paper. That's a little harder to do because often you'll meet an editor who decides what to accept or reject. But it is not impossible. What you have to do is go through your poem and make it more meaningful.

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