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Where is this Bus?

Etched in my mind
Time 11:05,never thought I'd cry
Why must it end, all we'v been through
Bus will arrive soon,
Life will die a little soon
Time slows, every second watched go
No!!you must not leave me, we were free Enjoyed being able to see
Warmth We be, dissipates at a rapid rate
Looking straight, I see your back to me
Last glimps of freedom, tear filled with US Touches every inch,like a million punches

Where is this dam bus

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Permalink Reply by Birgitta Abimbola Heikka on January 6, 2012 at 5:58pm

Nicepoem. A little different but I enoyed reading it.

Permalink Reply by Jonathon Koerner on January 6, 2012 at 11:31pm

Thx, yeah im experimenting with a couple different styles. Thx for your input, will have more because I write a lot, only post a few per day though.

Permalink Reply by Tabitha R. Pike on January 7, 2012 at 12:59pm

This is a very emotional write. I can feel that pain that one feels when someone you love walks away. It is a good write. Thanks for sharing this with us.

Permalink Reply by Robert L. Allen on January 9, 2012 at 8:52pm

I can hear the pain. I know this was hard to write, even if it came easy. Third line perhaps put in (after) all we been through. And the seventh sentence down, I would take out (me). Again, very heartfelt piece...

Permalink Reply by Jonathon Koerner on January 9, 2012 at 10:13pm

@robert, Thanks again, yes this was very hard to write, and still remember that day vividly. Strange how it seemed so slow,with everything else faded out except us. Thanks for the advice, think I will change it. Hopefully I will be publishing my first book soon, so everybody look out,need as much support as possible. Thanks!

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